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Some people believe that advertising is useful and informative while others believe it provides false information in order to increase the price of products and services. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. (29th Aug) (GT)

#people #information #price #products #services #aug #gt
Advertisements play a large part
of
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 people's daily life nowadays,
while
 some
seeing
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 those as positive trends to provide
latest
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information
, I personally agree with those who argue the necessity of advertising
due to
 various drawbacks derived from
such
 phenomena. On the bright side, advertising
provide
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 news regarding
latest
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the latest
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 promotion for consumers to find the most competitive price in the market.
For instance
, when
purchase
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 certain items, buyers
are tend
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 to browse as
many
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information
 as they can to find the best promotion,
in
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which advertising
play
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plays
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 essential
roles
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 to offer
such
information
.
Moreover
,
such
 methods are good for introducing advanced technologies in
pulbic
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public
 to gain more users, which is good for societies to make progress. 
On the other hand
, in my perspective,
such
 trends stimulate more negative impacts,
such
 as an influx of misleading
information
 which
exagerates
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exaggerates
 the quality of
prodcts
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products
,
along with
 it,
hidding
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hiding
 essential messages from
audiances
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audiences
.
For example
, many food companies toute their products as healthy products which contain a large
amont
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amount
 of sugar and salt.
Moreover
, individuals could be overwhelming and indecisive when they need to deal with lots of
information
, it fosters them to take longer time to make up their mind which
reduce
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 the efficiency. To summarise, it is inevitable that advertising
have
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 multiple advantages which could benefit societies and individuals.
However
, those
downside
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downsides
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 derived from advertising abuses should not be overlooked, considering it could encourage the spread of fake
information
.
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