The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The flow chart/processing demonstrates how to produce
bricks
in manufacturing factories/plants.
Overall
, there are 7 major stages in the process of producing
bricks
, beginning with collecting clay and ending with delivering finished
products
to construction material wholesalers.
First,
the manufacturing process starts by digging clay using diggers and
then
delivering them to factories. After that, clay will be put through metal grids that are used to break it up into smaller pieces. A roller assists in
this
process to deliver processed material into the next step. In the nest stage, the outcome
products
will be mixed with sand and water to have a mixture before becoming raw
bricks
by either filling into moulds or compressing through square holes
then
a wire cutter is used to cut that moulded mixture. After being placed on pallets, unprocessed
products
will be left until dry in a drying oven for one or two days.
Finally
, once the unprocessed
products
are dried, they will be gradually heated in a kiln with a medium temperature, from 200 to 980-celsius degrees,
then
brick pallets are transferred into
a
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830 to 1300*C kiln before reaching the cooling chamber, where they stay for 48 to 72 hours until they are completely cooled. After cooling, those
bricks
will be packaged and delivered to construction sites.
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