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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The two maps illustrate the change in the park named Grange from 1920 to the recent day.
Overall
, there were numerous facilities built for people who came to visit,
such
 as the amphitheatre for concerts, the playground for kids, and the waterfront.
In addition
, lots of seats had been reconstructed to the middle of the map, which surrounded the garden of planted roses.
According to
 the diagram when it started to let dwellers explore in 1920, there were several seats and gardens on each side of the park. It is noticeable that a large fountain in the middle, which is beside the musical stage.
Also
, there was a pond for water plants in the northeast and a glasshouse in the southeast. As can be seen from the following map, the rose garden in the northeast was replaced by the cafe shop,
moreover
, the stage was rebuilt into a large theatre. There is an entrance underground that connects a parking lot for people's convenience.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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