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The most important aim of science ought to be to improve people's lives.

#aim #science #people #lives
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It has been claimed that the main goal of
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 is to make everyone's life better. In
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 point and give some potential reasons for it.  There is no doubt that
science
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 improves our lives and if there is no
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 development, it would be difficult to differentiate modern human being from ancient
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. The reason for
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 is that we are using
science
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 every day in our lives.
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, let's think about mathematics
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. If someone needs to reach any place, that person has to know the distance, spending related to the road and the timing to gain the place. Someone would say that it's very simple and there is no relation to
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. But it definitely can be argued as calculating timing and cost is the
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 itself. Another significant point I would raise is that medicine and biology sciences are very important to us.
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, today's development of medical equipment and
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 knowledge of doctors are helping
people
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 to survive. In the ancient period, even small
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diseases
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 couldn't be handled and
people
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 suffer from them. But today there is excellent medicine and relevant drugs which can help many
people
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 around the world. At the same time, biology studies help to gain more information about
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 body, and improve
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understanding
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 it
work
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, which is
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useful
 in treatment and surgery I
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. It
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 helps to prevent
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any sickness in the future, as
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sience
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science
 explains the nature of
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environment
. To summarize, I would say that
science
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 plays a great role in our being and the results of its development will straight away affect our lives and would make them better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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