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Some people think that all university students sould study whatever they like. Others believe that they shoyld only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is studying at
university
. It is undeniable that study has become an essential part of our life.
However
, there is no absolute agreement on whether
students
 should be studying only those
subjects
, which will be useful in the
future
 or whatever they like. A commonly held belief is that
students
 must have
a
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freedom of choice
,
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 because we actually know about accidents, which took time between 2019 and 2022, I mean the Coronavirus and on
this
 stage, we had a lot of types of education, which seems to be irrelevant for us.
However
, we are just people and we are not able to predict the
future
and
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as evidence of
this
, they point to that well-rounded education is vital for us. Today we do not know, what happens tomorrow, so the
university
 must be a place, where people are able to express their opinions, share experiences with each other in certain fields of work, and so on.
As a result
, after graduating
university
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students
 will be prepared for all situations in the
future
.
On the other hand
, some people claim that we have a lot of predictions from scientists and we are pretty well prepared for our
future
,
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 and know, which type of work will be crucial in
the
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society,
such
 as accounting, finance,
economics
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or economics
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.
According to
 these things, they may mention that a
university
 must be a place where
students
 will study
subjects
, which are related to their education and
subjects
,
such
 as science and technology.
Therefore
, after graduating these
students
 will be successful and strong specialists in their fields. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account I would argue that it is better to study
subjects
 whatever
students
 want.
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