The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.
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The pie charts demonstrate the total spending rate of people in six categories in a European country in 1958 and 2008. From an
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perspective, there was an upward trend in Housing, Travel, and Luxury goods and a downward trend in Food, Clothing, and Entertainment over the period of 50 years. In the upward trend, Housing, which was the most expenditure, accounted for 22% in 1958. Following were Travel and Luxuries with 8 and 7% relatively. After 50 years, Housing, which rose from 22 to 32%, was still the most spent in the group meanwhile Travel and Luxury goods were the same when they both grew to 17%. In the downward community, Food, which made up 32%, was the highest spend and followed by Clothing and Entertainment, which accounted for 18 and 13% respectively, in 1958. In 2008, Food, which decreased from 32 to 12%, had switched place with Clothing which just dropped 2%.
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, Entertainment fell just over half of it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • expenditure
  • commodities
  • services
  • necessities
  • luxury goods
  • trends
  • significant changes
  • expenditure
  • housing and utilities
  • summarize
  • highlight
  • primary trends
  • fifty-year period
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • societal values
  • analyze
  • observe
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