The table gives information about the percentage of students' attendance in four groups of secondary schools between 2000 and 2009.

The table gives information about the percentage of students' attendance in four groups of secondary schools between 2000 and 2009.
The table gives information about the
percentage
of students'
attendance
in four groups of secondary
schools
between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
,
it is clear that
while
the figure for students attending Specialist
Schools
, Grammar
Schools
and Voluntary-controlled
Schools
witnessed a decrease, the opposite was true for those
Community
Schools
.
In addition
, the lowest
percentage
of school children's
attendance
was seen in
Community
Schools
in 2000 before having the highest
percentage
in 2009. In the beginning, the proportion of students who enrolled in Specialist
Schools
started at the lowest point- 12%, which was less than half of the Grammar’s
percentage
. After 9 years, the figure for
student’s
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attendance
in Grammar
Schools
declined significantly to 12%
while
Specialist
Schools’s
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percentage
just witnessed a slight drop of 2%.
Moreover
, starting in 2000, Voluntary-controlled
Schools
had the highest
percentage
with 52% compared to 12% in the proportion of
junior’s
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attendance
of
Community
Schools
. Over the 9-year period, the
percentage
of juniors going to
Community
Schools
increased dramatically before reaching the peak at 58%.
By contrast
, Voluntary-controlled
Schools
saw a considerable drop of 14% and 18% in 2005 and 2009 respectively.
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