Chart illustrates the proportion of the UK population to eat fruit and vegetables five times per day from 2001 to 2008.

Chart illustrates the proportion of the UK population to eat fruit and vegetables five times per day from 2001 to 2008.
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illustrates the proportion of the UK population to eat fruit and vegetables five times per day from 2001 to 2008.
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, there is a tendency to increase over the whole time for all types; The number of children and men rose sharply,
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the proportion of women increased moderately. The child figures remain lowest throughout the time frame; It started
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12% in 2001, remained stable until 2003 and
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steadily increased to about 25% in 2007. The proportion of men
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to be similar, but in 2001 it was around 17%, with no change over the next two years and
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began to rapidly increase to nearly 27% in 2007. Both segments of the population have dropped slightly compared to
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year on the chart.
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, the highest percentage of women eating five parts of fruits and vegetables in 2001 was, among others. Over time, it has grown from 2001 to 2006, from about 21% to about 34%,
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over the past two years, it has fallen by nearly 3%, still the highest figure in 2008.
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