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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and comparisons where relevant.

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 provided maps illustrate the current situation of the university
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its proposed extension for future development.
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the principal change will be the removal of outdoor courts
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 and a leisure
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 will be added
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 the eastern part of
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centre
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, which will attract more students to use the
sports
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centre
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. It is
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 noticeable that more
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 will be constructed despite some core
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 as reception,
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cm
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 will be preserved. The most fundamental
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 like changing room, a 25m
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 and reception will be in the same as always,
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at the
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 of the place. Before going in them, the entrance will be enlarged in double, and a
Sports
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 shop and Café will be added, one will be at the left and another one will be at the right corner
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 the entrance area. To serve more students for the new
sports
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facilities
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,
two
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 changing rooms will be added along the
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 sides of
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, the outdoor courts on the eastern and western part of
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centre
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 will be demolished to make way for the construction of a leisure
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,
sports
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 hall and
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 dancing studios. Meanwhile, there is a gym room to the north of the 25 cm swimming
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, which will be remarkably extended to be doubled so that more students can use it.
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