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Poverty in gender age in families. Discuss both sides.

#poverty #gender #age #families
Presented
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The presented
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 pie chart illustrates
poverty
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the poverty
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 level by family composition within
womens
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women
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,
while
pie
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the pie
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 chart gives information about
poverty
indicator
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indicators
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differentated
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differentiated
 by gender and age. The
statistic
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 data
taken
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was taken
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 in the United States in 2008. In general,
accordinng
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according
 to the data single women without children
rate
 was at 54
percent
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,
following
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followed
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 by 26
percent
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per cent
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 of married
womens
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women
 with no child.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, married women with children
was
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were
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 at 12
percent
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per cent
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 and least position at 8
percent
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per cent
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 belongs to single
womens
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women
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 with
childs
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children
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.
In addition
,
its
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it
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 clearly seems that
poverty
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the poverty
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rate
within
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among
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 females is
higer
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higher
that
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than
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mans
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men
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. The highest level of
women
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women's
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poverty
 was over 20
percent
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per cent
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 in the group ages under 5 and 18-24 years old. The lowest
rate
 belongs to
mens
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men
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on
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an
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avarege
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average
 of 10
pecents
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per cent
percents
within
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between
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 25 and 75 years old. To summarize, it can
been
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be
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 seen that more than half
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of womens
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womens
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women
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was
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were
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 single and had no child in 2008, and
womens
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women's
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poverty
 level was always at
highest
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the highest
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rate
 than
mens
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men
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.
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