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The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.

The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.
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Two possible sites for the supermarket are shown on the map of
Garlsdon
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, which is an industrial city with a total population of around 65,000.
Garlsdon
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 is surrounded by countryside and has a maintained infrastructure in terms of transportation. A railway runs from northeast to southwest , through the middle of the city,
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 making it more convenient for people to move and transport. Housing is available at the top and bottom of industrial areas. There are main roads which
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 make it easier for visitors to travel around. The map illustrates that position S1 is close to 10000 residents in the town
Hindon
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 and is located in the countryside of
Garlsdon
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.
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, People from
Garlsdon
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 and other cities can reach the market via train or main roads.
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, the second position S2 is in the middle of the town, where there is no traffic, and is much close to the two neighbouring towns, namely, Cranston and Bransdon, which has a total population of 44000. It must be noticed that S2 has easy access to a greater number of
costumers
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 than S1.
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