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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world.

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Tourism
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 is one
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 most important criteria in a
country
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’s economy. many nations in the world are dependent on
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tourism
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industry
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 as
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 source of revenue.
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,
tourism
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 can
also
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 make some
problem
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problems
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. In the following essay, I will provide some of
advantages
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 and disadvantages
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 the current problem. There are multifarious advantages in
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tourism
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industry
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. One of the main advantages is that the job market will expand. As more
tourist
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tourists
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 enter a
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, it is more likely that more people get those jobs that are linked to a specific area in the
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industry
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, Iran is renowned for its hand-crafted carpet, many tourists come to Iran yearly to buy
these spectacular and beautiful carpet
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this spectacular and beautiful carpet
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.
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, any jobs which
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 to
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industry
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 can be taken by the applicants. Another advantage of
burgeoning
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tourism
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industry
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 is that the
country
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 in general and the city
in particular
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 will be developed. In
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other word, the city’s scenery will be developed in a way that attracts tourists and encourages them to visit the
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 will take some serious uplifting
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 to make the city look better.
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, In Isfahan, some of the tourist
attraction
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attractions
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 places are much more developed in comparison to the other part of the city. One of
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 is that the combination of cultures could sometimes make
problem
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problems
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.
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, there are some people who enter another
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 without respecting its culture.
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 will confront these individuals, leading to arguments or even worse, physical altercations. In conclusion, the job opportunities and the development of a
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 will affect the state’s economy significantly.
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, the drawback of the combination of
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 can sometimes be problematic
to
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 a
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.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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