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You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of visit. Write a letter to your friend, in your letter 1-Explain the important event 2-Apologize for the situation 3- Suggest a new arrangement

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Hello Sam, How are you doing? I
posses
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possess
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two
news
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pieces of news
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 for you. One is undesirable for us and another is desirable. Anyway, I render you
first
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the first
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excited
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 news. My older sister Rita, she got a baby girl
last
 night after ten years of her marriage. We
were
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 waiting for
this
myraid
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myriad
 years.
Initially
, we had planned to organize only a small party and invite only lifelong friends, but now all
family
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 members decided to make a huge buzz on her Name
cermony
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ceremony
. As you know, I am the only one who can take
the
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responsibilty
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responsibility
of
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for
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 the whole event. So, I
am really apologize
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to cancel
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for canceling
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 my trip to your town on 22
july
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July
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. I will get a vacation on New
year
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Year
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 for weeks. I promise
with
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you I will come on
New
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the New
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year
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 holidays for two weeks.
Hopefully
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 you will get the holidays
on
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at
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 the same time and can
make
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have
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 fun together. Lots of love, Tania
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task response
The important event is explained clearly, but the apology could be more sincere and the new arrangement could be more specific.
coherence and cohesion
The content lacks clear paragraph structure and the greeting and closing need improvement for a formal letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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