Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today’s modern
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it is quite crucial to choose the right job,
along with
appropriate conditions.
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Concerning
of
this
, some individuals think that it is better to cope with
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awful occasion,
such
as unsatisfying work or
inappropriate
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salary,
however
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others are convinced that the best is to take all the measures to improve
such
situations. On one hand, the first option is likely to be more secure
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person’s
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further
career. It is because of
this
kind of
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, can
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his own status and influence,
Additionally
, it can affect only him, but other staff too.
Subsequently
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this
will
breakdown
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his reputation.
For instance
,
person
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the person
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who experienced bad treatment in a job, having a small budget can complain to his boss. But, it is said that bosses don’t support
such
an unsatisfactory related to
condition
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the condition
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he provided to
employee
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.
Therefore
, there is a minimal chance to
succed
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succeed
.
Consequently
, even if
individual
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didn’t get fired,
due to
some restrictions in law, at worst he will be
demonted
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demoted
demented
.
Hence
,
this
will make
such
a circumstance even worse than it was before.
On the other hand
, there
is
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also
some strong arguments to consider the second variant. Since, there is
also
a type of people who go through every obstacle, despite
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difficulties occurred. These have an opportunity to attain their goals and amend the established system, changing the lives of the other workers too.
Therefore
enhancing their status.
Nevertheless
, it cannot deny the fact that to achieve
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favourable outcome they have to be sufficiently literate and competent, being aware of any rule.
For example
, if there is injustice related to them in work and
such
a
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offence can be restricted by law legally,
worker
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can go to special organisations involving the issues with human rights.
Thus
, he can have a good result
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solving the problem. In conclusion, I think that
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fighting for
a
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better treatment is better, if there is an exact offence and if a person has enough knowledge he can handle the problem, making
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right decision and achieving the aim after all.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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