The graph illustrates the proportion of pattern changes of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.

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The graph illustrates the proportion of pattern changes

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domestic

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to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.

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, the highest percentage of

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to technology was in CD

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other patterns had some fluctuations over the period. Internet

access

had the lowest percentage. As

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shows, CD

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began

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60% in 1996 and 1997 years and

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increased steadily to nearly 82% in 2002-2003. Internet

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started in 1998-1999 at about

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10% and rose to just over 40% in 2002 and 2003 years.

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computer was higher than

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the Mobile

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phone in 1996-1997 with about 30%.

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about 45%. Afterwards, there was

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increase to about 70%,

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computer

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rose to almost 55% gradually

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the end of the period.

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The graph illustrates the proportion of pattern changes of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.

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