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The graph illustrates the proportion of pattern changes of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.

The graph illustrates the proportion of pattern changes of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.
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The graph illustrates the proportion of pattern changes
of
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 domestic
access
 to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.
Overall
, the highest percentage of
access
 to technology was in CD
player
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players
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,
while
 other patterns had some fluctuations over the period. Internet
access
 had the lowest percentage. As
graph
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the graph
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 shows, CD
player
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players
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 began
with
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 60% in 1996 and 1997 years and
then
 increased steadily to nearly 82% in 2002-2003. Internet
access
 started in 1998-1999 at about
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10% and rose to just over 40% in 2002 and 2003 years.
Home
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The home
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 computer was higher than
Mobile
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the Mobile
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 phone in 1996-1997 with about 30%.
However
 in 2000 and
2001
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 Mobile pulled ahead
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 about 45%. Afterwards, there was
noticeable
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 increase to about 70%,
while
computer
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computers
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 rose to almost 55% gradually
in
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 the end of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words access with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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