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Traffic jams are a problem in many towns and cities today. Some people say that the solution is to build wider roads. Do you agree or disagree?

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Heavy traffic is a major issue in numerous downtown locations. In
this
 essay, I will explore why constructing larger motorways will not solve
this
 issue and I will provide a better solution to reduce cars on the road.
Although
 building wider roads will
initially
 increase capacity, it will eventually be saturated by people taking other modes of transportation.
This
 is because commuters who usually take public
transportion
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transportation
 will now start to use the new street, as it will be faster than taking the train.
Thus
, it will not have an impact
in
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 reducing commuting time by allowing more vehicles to drive on the street.
Furthermore
, the cost of building a spacious road is too high and the budget can be utilised in a better fashion.
For example
, if the flow of traffic
increased
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increases
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by ten
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ten fold
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then
 the
maintance
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maintenance
 cost will
also
 rise, as there will be more wear and tear on the asphalt.
Therefore
, the money can be used to make a better train network which can aid in transporting a lot more passengers per day because the carrying capacity of trains is higher than vehicles.
Hence
, improving existing public transportation will facilitate a larger portion of the population to travel to popular destinations. In conclusion, I believe that building wider motorways will not decrease the higher number of drivers on the road because it will allow people who take more effective
mode
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 of travel, to start using the wider street.
Moreover
, resources can be used more effectively to reduce traffic by improving train and bus lines which can carry a lot more passengers.
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