task one: the two tables here show the percentages of smokers in different age groups. Please summarize and compare the information.
The two tables compare how the habit of smoking is distributed statistically over 6
age
clusters in men
versus women
. The overall
trend is that as the age
grows, people are less inclined towards such
habits. The maximum tendency is seen among the early 20s.
Teenage boy smokers
, between 16 and 19 years old, account for 23% of their age
group, which is only 2 per cent less than the corresponding female smokers
. In all the other age
groups
, men
represent a higher percentage. 20-24-year-olds demonstrate the highest peak in men
and women
each, 36 and 29 respectively. Light
smokers
in both genders are way higher in number than heavy ones, at least 4 times more.
25-49 yrs which covers two of the age
groups
33% smokers
among men
and 28% among women
; among whom, the absolute majority are light
smokers
especially the males in their middle age
, 22% on average.
The last
category, the 50-year-olds and over, demonstrate the least inclination for smoking among all age
groups
. Men
are about 20% and women
about 18%; and light
smokers
, similar to the last
2 groups
, are more light
smokers
.Submitted by f.farkhany71 on
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