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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that helping the unpaid
community
 should be added to school curricula, and
pupils
 ought to do it free of charge. In the following essay, I will discuss why I agree with
this
 statement as a positive event and elaborate
each
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 perspective.
Pupils
 must get to know how to help others and being helpful as a part of
the
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society should be taken into consideration. It is necessary for children to know how to help other people and learn to be helpful in life is very crucial that they might learn it in their early life. They must have known that they are not apart from
the
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society and these
community
 needs their attention as they grow up.
For example
, In the USA some institutions and schools take children to these charity communities and teach
pupils
 how to help others.
However
, some individuals believe that it is not a necessary option that
pupils
 might learn it in their early life. They will have automatically learned how to help other people as they graduate from high school. Being compulsory may have a negative effect on the
students
.
For example
, if
students
 are going to be taken to
the a
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 charity
community
, they must lose their interest in helping others because they are forced to. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
 statement and it is because if the
students
 are taken to the charity
community
 they will get to know what problems
are exist
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 in our world and they may try to fix them when they grow up.

To conclude
,
pupils
 must
leaned
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 how to be helpful as a part of the society. It is necessary that
pupils
 should learn
this
in
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the
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 early
ages
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 because they are flexible enough to understand the situation.
However
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 some individuals argue that it must have a negative influence on the
students
 because they may lose their interest. In my
opinion
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this
 is not the case and the reason for
that is
 that they may encounter what are the problems in the world and they will try to fix them.
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