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The diagram below shows the water supply system in Australia at present and in the future.

The diagram below shows the water supply system in Australia at present and in the future.
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The two maps provide information about the changes which will happen to Australia with the changing
water
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 supply system in the future.
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 it can be said that the working method of the organization will change dramatically, and it will turn into a more modern and useful system. As can be clearly seen in the first diagram which shows the current structure
water
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 goes to the households, shops, city and factories from storage.
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 waste
water
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 goes to the
water
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 treatment unit for transferring to the river. Storm
water
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 goes to the river too.
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hand
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 there will have been some fundamental alterations to the system.
To begin
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with
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 wastewater and stormwater will not be passed to the river.The
water
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 treatment plant will produce
pure-
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pure water
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water
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while
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 getting wastewater from people.
Furthermore
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 stormwater will go to the
water
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 treatment

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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