Some people think that secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects; but others believe that it is waste of their valuable study time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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the technology improvement,
people
got the latest
news
easier than before. So some
people
advice
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the secondary
school
should open a new course about the international
news
. But others disagree
this
suggests. These
people
think
that is
waste
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a waste
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of the
students
study
time. In recent
years
, the global environment has
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huge change
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everything not only political. All of the
students
should
known
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what happened in the world
everyday
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. In my view that will decide their future.
For example
, most Chinese secondary
school
students
focus
their
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first big exam in their three
years
, it is ‘Zhong Kao’, but
in
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these year
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, the exams
some
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titles not only from their lesson books, some from the latest international
news
. So if they don’t know what happened in the world, they can not
to
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get
a
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best achievement. In fact,
the
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international
news
is not important to become a course in the
school
. In secondary
school
,
students
only have three
years
to
study
there
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essential courses.
Therefore
, they cannot waste their valuable time. I
am understand
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some
people
disagree
these
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with these
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suggestions about
to
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studying
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study
international
news
. I agree
students
known
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international
news
is very useful for their life. And it will become a good habit but it
not
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necessary
become
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a
courses
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to spend a
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time
study
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.
Overall
, I agree with the
people
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people's
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advice
students
should
study
international
news
to
known
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the global
environment
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change. But in my opinion,
students
just
study
by themselves
that is
enough. Because in the three
years
,
students
need to prepare
their
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for their
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first big exam that should be significant.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global awareness
  • Critical thinking
  • Global citizenship
  • Cultural diversity
  • Communication skills
  • Historical context
  • World affairs
  • Academic subjects
  • Bias
  • Misinformation
  • Age-appropriate
  • Media literacy
  • Educational enrichment
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