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The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
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The map given shows the current situation in the
town
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 of Norbition and information about future developments planned for the
town
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.
Overall
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, we can see that a lot of improvements are planned for the
town
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, mainly the addition of houses where people can occupy the space and make it a township.
In addition
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, constructing a bridge across the river will gain connectivity to the people that are living across the river. Plus, agricultural land will be decreased post the construction of these buildings.
Firstly
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, 8 factories are now available in the industrial area,
whereas
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 all the industries will vanish during the development . 7 housings are included
along with
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 shops, a medical centre, a playground for children, and a school for their education.
Furthermore
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, the expansion of roads makes it easier for the inhabitants to travel inside the industrial sector which connects them to shopping marts, hospitals, educational institutions, and playgrounds,
as well as
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 to the
town
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 nearby.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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