The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The table and chart are
explainging
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explaining
the budget of police with the distributing fields in the
year
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years
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2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. In the
year
2017, the highest income source was
national
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the national
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government. It was $175.5
millions
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. After that, local tax and other sources
are came
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.
In
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This
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this
year
, in the
field
of salary
distributed
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the maximum number of budget
.
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was.
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It was $75
million
.
Next
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The next
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most expensive expenditure
field
was infrustracuter and road development. And at
last
, Technology came. Only $8
million
were distributed in
this
field
. After one
year
, sources of income rose in all sectors. From national government collected fund was $177.8
millions
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, which was increased by almost $3
million
. Local taxes were
uprised
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surprised
by $11
millions
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million
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. Even though Other sources
also
were
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increased by $ .5
million
.
However
, in the
field
of distribution
salary
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salaries
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dropped by $4miilion and Building and transport remain the same. Unless there was an increment of budget in technology. Before
this
year
it was 8
million
but
in
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this
year
it was $14
millions
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million
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, millions, field, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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