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Water pollution has been an increasing problem over the last few decades. What causes water pollution? How can we prevent this problem?

#water #pollution #decades
In recent years , It is certainly true that
water
 contamination has become a major
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 in many countries. There are many reasons for
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the
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 percentage
water
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 pollution,
however
, there are several effective measures to solve
this
 issue . To being with, The primary reason for
water
 contamination is
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 revolution. To illustrate,
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most
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factories
ues
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water
 in their production process in order to
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 or
heating
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 and they
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 the
water
 with harmful chemicals substances, and
then
 factories release
water
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polluted
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 the river or oceans without chemical treatment in order to clean it from dangers substances.
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households
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 dump is another reason why the proportion of
water
 pollution has increased.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that
,
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 increasing the number of families
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 can put a
lot
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 pressure on
sewage
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 system.
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,
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most of
this
 waste
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end up in oceans, river, and lake. Regarding the solutions, the first effective measure,
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 governments can introduce harsh laws to force
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companies to tackle their waste prior
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to
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 the oceans. They
also
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 companies
according to
 their hazardous
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water
 quality. The second solution, build more desalination plants, which
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can help to convert the
water
 polluted to fresh
water
. In conclusion, there are
a
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various reasons behind
increase
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the
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 percentage of
water
 contamination namely,
industrial
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 revolution,
increase
 the
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 waste,
on the other hand
, there are diverse ways to deal with
this
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constructe
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constructing
 more desalination plants.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Toxic substances
  • Eutrophication
  • Algae blooms
  • Pathogens
  • Nutrients
  • Organic matter
  • Marine environments
  • Coastal ecosystems
  • Microplastics
  • Food chain
  • Hazardous chemicals
  • Mining activities
  • Industrial waste
  • Agricultural runoff
  • Sewage and wastewater
  • Oil spills
  • Plastic pollution
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