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In many countries today, women have full-time jobs. Therefore, it is reasonable to share housework equally between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is often argued that some humankind believes that it is very important to divide the housework equally between males and females in most parts of the world.In
this
 essay,we discuss
this
 view and I strongly agree with the given notion.
To begin
 with,nowadays,women are equally working as men and earning almost the same so it is the responsibility of our society to encourage sharing of
work
 at home as it can help the ladies to get some rest ,
,
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 there can be too much burden on a single person and it can disturb the mental health of the person.
For instance
,partners prefer to do alternative shifts so that one can handle their child at home and the other one can
work
 in Canada.
Moreover
, the distribution of
work
 helps an individual to learn new skills on his own.Most of the time,men usually have knowledge about office
work
 and women prefer doing household
work
.So,if
work
 will be shared, the men's community can
also
 learn how to cook and clean the house. In a nutshell,It is concluded that sharing
of
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household
work
 is very beneficial.
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