Social media helps people to keep in touch with friends and stay on top of news and events. Do you think the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

These day
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, social
media
have become much broader
popularity
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in
this
modern world.
Although
,
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it can help
people
keep in touch with
others
and follow the trends, it causes
people
to get
stresses
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. In the following paragraphs, the benefits and drawbacks of social
media
will be outlined in detail.
To begin
with, it is undeniable that most
people
in the world have spent more than 6 hours per day on social
media
, being the third component of their bodies. One of the major
benefit
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is that
people
can update the latest news immediately.
For example
, the news is announcing
about
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fires and
while
people
are scrolling
their
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phones, they could know
that
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which place they should not visit.
Additionally
, the news mostly
come
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from sharing by their
friends
and following pages on social
media
.
Furthermore
, social
media
leading
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leads
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people
close to one
others
more, especially their peers. To illustrate, despite the fact that
people
have not met or talked with their
friends
for long, they can perceive each
others
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life by just watching through social
media
such
as Facebook, Instagram, even Tiktok. Even
through
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though
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, social
media
has much wider benefits, it causes plenty of drawbacks which is lacking of speeches.
For instance
,
people
always look
on
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at
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their phones all the time and
not
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much talk to each
others
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other
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even when
dinning
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dining
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.
Next,
social
media
also
causes
people
getting
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to get
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more stress.
For example
, when they see their
friends
bought something new, it is certainly true that they would have
that things
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like their
friends
.
In addition
, the trend on social
media
also
update
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all the time, leading to getting more stress since most
people
would follow the trends. To summarize, from my perspective, social
media
offers both advantages and disadvantages equally which depends on
individual
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in
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time
spending
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instantaneous communication
  • geographical barriers
  • information hub
  • breaking news
  • educational content
  • professional networking
  • industry experts
  • community support
  • privacy infringement
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • mental wellbeing
  • social comparison
  • online validation
  • cyberbullying
  • detriments
  • vulnerable individuals
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