Social media helps people to keep in touch with friends and stay on top of news and events. Do you think the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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, social
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have become much broader
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in
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modern world.
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it can help
people
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keep in touch with
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and follow the trends, it causes
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to get
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. In the following paragraphs, the benefits and drawbacks of social
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will be outlined in detail.
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with, it is undeniable that most
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in the world have spent more than 6 hours per day on social
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, being the third component of their bodies. One of the major
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benefits
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is that
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can update the latest news immediately.
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, the news is announcing
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fires and
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people
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are scrolling
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phones, they could know
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which place they should not visit.
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, the news mostly
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from sharing by their
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and following pages on social
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.
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, social
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leading
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leads
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people
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close to one
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more, especially their peers. To illustrate, despite the fact that
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have not met or talked with their
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for long, they can perceive each
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others
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life by just watching through social
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such
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as Facebook, Instagram, even Tiktok. Even
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, social
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has much wider benefits, it causes plenty of drawbacks which is lacking of speeches.
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,
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always look
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their phones all the time and
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much talk to each
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others
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even when
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social
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also
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causes
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getting
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to get
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more stress.
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, when they see their
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bought something new, it is certainly true that they would have
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that thing
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like their
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.
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, the trend on social
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also
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update
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all the time, leading to getting more stress since most
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would follow the trends. To summarize, from my perspective, social
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offers both advantages and disadvantages equally which depends on
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in
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time
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instantaneous communication
  • geographical barriers
  • information hub
  • breaking news
  • educational content
  • professional networking
  • industry experts
  • community support
  • privacy infringement
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • mental wellbeing
  • social comparison
  • online validation
  • cyberbullying
  • detriments
  • vulnerable individuals
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