Social media helps people to keep in touch with friends and stay on top of news and events. Do you think the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?
These day
, social Change the determiner
This day
These days
media
have become much broader popularity
in Replace the word
popular
this
modern world.
Although
,
it can help Remove the comma
apply
people
keep in touch with others
and follow the trends, it causes people
to get stresses
. In the following paragraphs, the benefits and drawbacks of social Wrong verb form
stressed
media
will be outlined in detail.
To begin
with, it is undeniable that most people
in the world have spent more than 6 hours per day on social media
, being the third component of their bodies. One of the major benefit
is that Change to a plural noun
benefits
people
can update the latest news immediately. For example
, the news is announcing about
fires and Change preposition
apply
while
people
are scrolling their
phones, they could know Change preposition
through their
that
which place they should not visit. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Additionally
, the news mostly come
from sharing by their Change the verb form
comes
friends
and following pages on social media
. Furthermore
, social media
leading
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leads
people
close to one others
more, especially their peers. To illustrate, despite the fact that people
have not met or talked with their friends
for long, they can perceive each others
life by just watching through social Change to a genitive case
other's
media
such
as Facebook, Instagram, even Tiktok.
Even through
, social Correct your spelling
though
media
has much wider benefits, it causes plenty of drawbacks which is lacking of speeches. For instance
, people
always look on
their phones all the time and Change preposition
at
not
much talk to each Add a missing verb
do not
others
even when Change to a singular noun
other
dinning
. Correct your spelling
dining
Next,
social media
also
causes people
getting
more stress. Change the verb form
to get
For example
, when they see their friends
bought something new, it is certainly true that they would have that things
like their Change the determiner
that thing
those things
friends
. In addition
, the trend on social media
also
update
all the time, leading to getting more stress since most Change the verb form
updates
people
would follow the trends.
To summarize, from my perspective, social media
offers both advantages and disadvantages equally which depends on individual
Add an article
the individual
in
time Change preposition
apply
spending
.Replace the word
spent
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