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The international community must act immediately to ensure that all countries reduce their consumption of fossil fuels such as gas, oil, and coal. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

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Infromation
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Information
 is provided by a bar chart and a table. The bar chart
show
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 us
salaries
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the salaries
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 of several
profession
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 in comparison
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initial
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 stage and after
three
years
. The table
provide
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 data about average working
hours
 per week. Certainly, the most profitable job
from
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 all represented is an underground driver. People from
this
 profession make
on
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the
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 average
50000
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pounds
 a year when they start to work and 51000
pounds
 after
three
years
experience
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of experience
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. Nurses usually get more than twice less money per year, around 18000
pounds
 and 1000
pounds
 more
three
years
 later.
Although
nureses
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nurses
 work two
hours
 more a week than underground drivers (38
hours
 and 36
hours
 respectively), they earn much less money.
Moreover
, firefighters work about 55
hours
 per week
,
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 but receive 10000
pounds
 less than underground drivers. By the way, in all professions except for the policeman
due to
three
years
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 experience wages increase only
on
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1000
pounds
while
polisemen
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policemen
 get 2000 more in
three
years
.
Summirizing
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Summarizing
, it can be figured out that the number of working
hours
 and even working experience do not always affect income. Salaries
are directly depend
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 on
types
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the types
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 of jobs
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