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the charts gives the information about two ggenre of tv shows watched by men and women and 4 diferent age groups in australia. the charts gives the information about two ggenre of tv shows watched by men and women and 4 diferent age groups in australia.

the charts gives the information about two ggenre of tv shows watched by men and women and 4 diferent age groups in australia. the charts gives the information about two ggenre of tv shows watched by men and women and 4 diferent age groups in australia.
#information #two #ggenre #tv #men #women #diferent #age #groups #australia
The bar graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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regarding
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apply
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two shows of
reality
 shows and
game
 shows watched by male and female
and
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apply
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for
diferent
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different
genrations
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generations
 age groups in Australia.
According to
 the
chart
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,chart
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 70%
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of female
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female
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females
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 mostly watched
realiuty
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reality
 shows rather
than
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and
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male
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males
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 watched 38% . But the age group of 45
they
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apply
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watched equally
reality
 and
game
 shows. For
exmple
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example
, Ladies gives lots of interest in
reality
showa
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shows
 rather than other shows.
Additionally
, In the second chart of
game
 shows 64%
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of male
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male
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males
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 prefer sports
game
 shows and they watched
game
 shows with
enjoy
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enjoyment
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 than
reality
 shows. But
the
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apply
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60%
women
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of women
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 watched
game
 shows as
compare
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compared
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 to male. The number of groups watched equally
such
 as 16-24.
whereas
,
25
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the 25
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-34 and 35-44 age groups
lots of
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apply
show examples
watched
reality
 shows
than
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more than
show examples
game
 shows.
overall
 70%
people
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of people
show examples
 watched
reality
 shows.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reality, game with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 14 times.
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