You are a student, and your local government has recently proposed a new policy to increase the homework for students. They believe that more homework will improve educational outcomes. However, there is a heated debate in your community regarding this proposal. Some people argue that homework will burden students and take away from their free time and extracurricular activities. Others believe that it will provide more time for focused learning and better prepare students for their future. As a student, please write a letter to your local government to provide your opinion on whether you support or oppose the proposed policy.

Dear Sir or Madam I am Jason, and I am a

third year

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university student at Richmond University. I love to stay and

study

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here in

this

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town. The local government has to offer many good conditions for the people here.

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, in the early of

this

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year

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I heard that the local government has proposed a new policy to increase the

homework

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for students. Some people agreed but others did not agree with

this

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idea. As a student, I think

this

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is not a good idea. I have been studying at the

school

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for 15 years and I did not see the easy program in the

school

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. We had to work very hard to finish the

homework

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and the program in

the

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school

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. In many countries, the students do not

study

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too hard.

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of the

kid

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spend

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all day

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studying

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study

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, they can play and have more free

time

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to enjoy

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life. When you know how to

enjey

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enjoy

the

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life, you will learn something new

easilly

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easily

. In Finland, they co-operate

beween

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between

been

studing

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studying

and playing. The student

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does

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not need to spend too much

time

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for

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the

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apply

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homework

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so they can spend

time

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with

the

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their

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family or

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apply

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nature. I hope you will consider that idea and do not need to push the

kid

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study

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more. As the adult, we always want

the

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our

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kid

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have

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a better future but we should

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apply

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look deeply and contemplate before making the

desision

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decision

. In

colusion

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conclusion

collusion

, we do not need to change the

school

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system now. We have to give more

time

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for

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the

kid

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and do not need to

increse

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increase

homework

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for them.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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