Percentage of UK people who consumed daily recommended amont of fruit and vegetable in 2002,2006 and 2010.

This
bar graph depicts the proportion of the daily consumption of
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and fruit
according to
British people in three different years (2002,2006 and 2010).  It is clear from the graph that, the percentage of consumption was at its highest in 2006. 
According to
what is shown, the number of men
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fluctuated from 22% to 24% between 2002 and 2010.  As for women, they started at 23 per cent in 2002. After that, the figure increased significantly to reach 32 per cent in 2006. 
Moreover
, the number dropped sharply in 2010 to reach 26%
at the end
of the period. 
Whereas
, children were at 11
percent
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in 2002.  After that, the figure soared substantially by almost 7
percent
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to reach 18% in 2006. 
Finally
, the percentage had a small dip
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2
percent
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to be at 16
percent
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To sum up
, we could say that men and women
had
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consumed the highest amount of
vegetable
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and fruit in the mentioned span.
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