The two line graphs compare the percentage of houses which owned electrical appliances and how much time of housework which was costed in households in a specific country from 1920 to 2019.

The two line graphs compare the percentage of houses which owned electrical appliances and how much time of housework which was costed in households in a specific country from 1920 to 2019.
The two-line graphs illustrate the percentage of households that had electrical appliances and how much time of
housework
which amounted to households in a particular region from 1920 to 2019.
To begin
with, in 1920 only 2 per
cent
of people used
refrigerators
while
30 per
cent
used
vacuum
cleaners, and 40 per
cent
used washing machines. The number of
hours
spent on
housework
was 50
hours
per
week
. In 1940, the usage of
refrigerators
increased to 55% as compared to the
vacuum
cleaner and washing
machine
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60% and 50%. In the same
year
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number
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the number
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of
hours
per
week
for
housework
decreased to 35
hours
.
Furthermore
, in 1960 the fraction of usage for washing machine and
vacuum
cleaner were the same
in contrast
to
the
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refrigerator. 20
hours
a
week
was allocated for cleaning. In 1980 a decrease in the percentage use of washing machines was noted as compared to
vacuum
cleaners and
refrigerators
. About 15
hours
per
week
was utilized for
housework
.
Lastly
, in the year 2000 to 2019, 100 per
cent
of households had
refrigerators
and
vacuum
cleaners in comparison with washing machines 71 per
cent
. There was a decline in number of
hours
spent on
housework
from 15
hours
to 11
hours
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, cent, refrigerators, vacuum, hours, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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