A local college wants people with a job to come and talk to students about what it is like to work. You would like to come forward and talk to the students about your job. Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter, •explain what you would like to talk about • say why students would be interested in your job • suggest a possible date and time for the talk

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Dear Sir/Ma'am, I am writing

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letter to tell you that

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intrested

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interested

in your college program and want to talk about some

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of banking and the job opportunity in

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the bank

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. I work in

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National Bank of India as a Deputy

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manager

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get me that information that many

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youngesters

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youngsters

do not aware about the banking system and in which posts they will work in the bank. If you give me

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permission,

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would love to share knowledge of

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things

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students. I must say if they knowing that how

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interesting

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job is they will definitely love to work in

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field

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net banking and

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teach their parents and relatives.

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, more and more people get information about it and it is

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beneficial for them.

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next week because my holidays are only for

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any

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convenient

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we arranged

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meeting because after one week my vacation is finished and it is hard for me to get

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time. So, If you are

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kindly let me know. Yours faithfully, Trishana Iyer.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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