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You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant’s manager. In your letter, -Explain that you would like to apply for the job -Give some details of any relevant experience that you have -Specify the days and times that would suit you

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Dear Sir, I
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 to inform you of my interest in the recently advertised
job
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 in your local restaurant. I would like to apply for
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job
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 because I believe I
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up with
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the criteria listed for the
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, considering that the
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 requires a female and someone
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 is very flexible.
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, ADD A COMMA
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, It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase
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. Consider adding a comma.
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 I have an unadulterated experience in hotel management where I worked as a chef and I have good experience in food handling which I feel will be required in the advertised offer.
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, I would appreciate it if I could be placed on weekends specifically morning shifts, because it will enable me to go ADD THE PARTICLE to go It appears that the verb go should be in the to-infinitive form. Consider adding the word to.
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 about my school programmes on weekdays FIX THE AGREEMENT MISTAKE weekdays It seems that
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 may not agree in number with other words in
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 phrase.
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 as a
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 CHANGE NOUN FORM master's It seems that
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 student. Looking forward to hearing from you soon Thank you Yours Faithfully Anthonia
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunity
  • hospitality
  • customer service
  • availability
  • flexibility
  • relevant experience
  • part-time
  • apply
  • enthusiastic
  • schedule
  • diligent
  • team player
  • efficient
  • detail-oriented
  • proactive
  • communicative
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