In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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Lots of countries prioritise economic growth

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of social progress and other concerns like healthcare. IT auger well for the country's economic growth and tax collection.

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It creates dissatisfaction among the general public and gives rise to social problems like inequality of income IF, countries are focussing on economic

development

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by building infrastructure and roads and rail lines. It creates lots of jobs for the public. simultaneously tax collection in countries

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improves.

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can be used for

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development

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, Dubai

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the regime has built infrastructure like skyscrapers and renting it out to foreign nationals has created a new stream of income for the government. But it has created many social problems.like strict laws for tourists and a ban on them if they interact with locals.

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, the general public

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feels isolated as there is no proper

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scheme run by the Dubai government.

Citizens

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do menial kinds of jobs to support their families. Which gives rise to inequality of income within society.

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leads to dissatisfaction among

citizens

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. To cite an example, Mauritius has developed its economy on tourist inflow on an annual basis where the government is balancing between

development

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and protecting the environment.Mauritius is trying

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infrastructure considering its

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priorities and keeping the environment protected.

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will create ample opportunities for

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to take advantage of the tourist boom in Mauritius. .

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, economic growth should not be considered a priority. the welfare of the public with all aspects of life needs to be prioritised. Problems like healthcare, education, and welfare should be addressed as priorities. Economic prosperity should be inclusive of all sections of society. As it promotes equality and a sense of achievement among

citizens

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. It should be always

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people's first priority.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

economic growth
quality of life
standard of living
infrastructure development
employment opportunities
environmental impact
wealth disparity
modernization
sustainable development
Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
industrialization
ecological footprint
capital investment
urbanization
economic prosperity
fiscal policy

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