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ome people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#ome #people #situation #job #shortage #money #situations
In the
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 world have two type of
people
, the first
that is
 suffered from
the
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difficulties time in their
life
 and suppose
that is
 the best solution to settle down
whereas
 some hold
that is
 behind the times and make a decision to breakthrough their
life
. Obviously, in my
opinion
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people
 who want to improve their
life
 will
better
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do better
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 than some
choose
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who choose
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 to suffer. On the one hand, some do believe the lowest facility of their
life
 is the best
due to
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livestream
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a livestream
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 or part-time job.
Moreover
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 some don'
t
 want to get out of
the
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their
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 comfort zone probably
they
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because they
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 want to settle down and safety. They point out the disabilities who are
have
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a
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significantly
defected
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 and they can'
t
 choose their own dreams and probably know it's lucky for them to have a job, but we can'
t
 deny that they don'
t
 have the talent.
Besides
 others fall into
the
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terrible circumstances and obviously they can deal with
this
 but they find a way to avoid
from
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this
 rather than
tackle
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ittackle
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.
On the other hand
, I suppose that
people
 who have a purpose in their
life
 will rather than some astray.
Person
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People
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 who every now and
then
 sleep on it about the
improve
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improved
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 quality of their
life
 will have a good
physically
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physical
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 and
mentally
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mental
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.
Besides
 society need someone who are adapt
their
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to their
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 tasks and just only that thing will bring
a
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improvement in the world. For the reasons mentioned above, I argued that
people
 had better
development
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 their
life
instead
 of accepting them.
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