The table below shows the propotion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the propotion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The given table demonstrates the percentage of
families
living with scarcity in Australia in 1999.
Overall
, It can be clearly seen that single parents live with
greatest
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rate of poverty
while
elder
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couple has a little percentage of difficulties. Looking at
this
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details,
single
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parent has faced
a
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biggest shortage than other kinds of
families
.
In addition
, the highest rate was 21% of the population, representing 933,000 people,
whereas
the lowest
propotion
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proportion
was
older
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an older
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couple
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couples
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with only 4% of the population, representing 48000 people.
According to
this
rates
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, family of both parent with their kids was spending their life with
12
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% average of poverty and
1999
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, 933,000 of these
families
were in Australia. It is a substantial amount than other categories. In
contemporary
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era,
significant
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number of 211,000 couples have decided to live without toddlers, but they had to suffer from
7
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% rate of
deciciency
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deficiency
.
conversely
,
although
some
indiviuals
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individuals
were living without any partner or kids, they had a considerable quantity of financial shortage compared with other
families
. It
have
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recorded as 19% and 359,000
of
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people.
However
, during
this
year, all residents confronted about 11% of poverty. It was 1,837,000 amount from
whole
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population
in
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Australia.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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