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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be usefull in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 some citizens believe that college
students
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 should
study
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 whatever they desired, others believe that they should only be allowed to
analize
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analyse
 educational subjects that will be
usefull
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useful
 in the future,
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those
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 related to science and technology.
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, some individuals support that university
students
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 must
study
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 whatever they desired because they need to feel interested in what they like, so many pupils blame their low scores
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 boring subjects.
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, many young
students
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 find
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 to
study
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 art or music because these subjects might lift their
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however
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this
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skills
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 are not practical
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in the
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 real
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world
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 to be able to find a suitable job. More importantly, many of these
students
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 finished a degree
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 general knowledge and they have no opportunities to find a decent job in a company because these businesses are looking for people that have online
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.
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, nowadays in The
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 you can find well-educated people working
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 online private classes with a low salary because they find no other opportunities to be hired.
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, I believe
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 is a sad situation for them because they obtain a degree and they have no better chances to work
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 the lack of online
skills
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. Most of
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society
support
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 the idea of learning computer
skills
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 or anything related
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 science because these
carreers
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careers
carriers
 are
on
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 high
demand
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, so parents encourage their children to obtain a degree
as
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 IT courses.
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, if
students
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 have knowledge of websites or computers, they will have higher opportunities to find a
high- paying
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high-paying
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 salary. These types of courses like IT tech are
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demand
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 every day, and companies are willing to
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 them immediately. On top of
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, many of these
students
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 have the opportunity to work from home because working online is reachable anywhere. To explain
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, when
covi-19
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cover-19
 started many regular employees
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 their jobs;
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, those who were working on websites had huge
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on
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 jobs and they received a better
salary
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. I believe
this
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 is a
peferable
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preferable
 way for
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universities to prepare
students
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 who will have a high
demand
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on
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 companies. In conclusion,
although
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 many people believe
students
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 should feel free to
study
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 whatever they desired, I believe they need to be guided for studying only
skills
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 they are going to need in the
nearly
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 future
such
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 as science or technology, and avoid
waisting
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wasting
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 time by studying something they are not going to use.
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