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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the provided chart reveals the survey result of people’s habits of buying and drinking
coffee
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 and tea throughout five Australian cities.
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, more than half the population in all cities except
Adelaide
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 have preferred to go to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea,
while
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 buying instant
coffee
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 was
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 popular and buying fresh
coffee
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generally
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 less common. Looking first of all at going to cafes, it was most characteristic of Melbourne and Hobart at 64% and 63%, respectively. Sydney was comparably high at just over 60%, followed by Brisbane at over 55%, and
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Adelaide
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 at under 50%.
Adelaide
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 was the only city where people bought more instant
coffee
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 by a slight margin of 50%. In Hobart, instant
coffee
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 purchases stood at 54%, ahead of Brisbane at 52%, Melbourne at 48%, and
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 Sydney at just over 45%. Stocking up on fresh
coffee
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 was below 45% for all cities. It was most common in Sydney (44%) and Melbourne (52%). Hobart was next at 39%, and
Adelaide
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 and Brisbane were much lower and nearly level at around 34%.

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