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The figure shows the results of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries. The participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The bar chart illustrates information from a survey of 1000 people in their adolescence in five divided nations, showing the community’s belief about definite
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 and obligations for teenagers.
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 the majority of Japanese twenty-something adolescents held an opinion that marriage, voting, and criminal responsibility are
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 that should be taken into account.
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, other domestic citizens showed their beliefs about
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 entitlements in the middle of
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 15 and 20. As represented in the chart, there are various views in all five countries. For marriage, the minimum
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 identified ranged from 16 in Mexico and Egypt to the highest of about 22 in Japan. Other countries,
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 as the USA and UK, showed similar results that most teenagers consider
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 at sole 17. The mass population in different territories believes that voting
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 should be authorized for youngsters. There was the same pattern seen in comparison to the former information. The highest
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 of participants belonged to Japan (about 20),
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 it was lower in Egypt and the USA (18 and 17 respectively), and the minimum in the UK and Mexico, with the
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 at 16. Noticeably, the desire to advance the community’s attention to criminal responsibility is seemingly lower than other
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’ willingness. The popular ages ranged from the lowest in the US (about 12) to the highest in Japan (at 17).
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