The table below shows the result of a survey asked 6800 Scottish (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates information about the output of the questionnaire which contains six different cultural
activities
by 6800 respondents aged 16 years and over in Scotland during the last
year.
Overall
, the most cultural activities
that young people
and adults took part in was any performance. In addition
, people
aged 16 – 24 years also
love to participate in visual arts activities
. Meanwhile, middle age and older people
love to spend their time undertaking crafts activities
. Furthermore
, the lowest activities
that Scottish people
enjoy were computer base and writing activities
.
Looking into details, it is evident that 35 per cent
of youth and 22 per cent
of adults have an interest in doing any performance activities
such
as. singing, playing musical instruments and acting. Additionally
, 30 per cent
of young adults also
participate in any visual arts. Moreover
, there was 22 per cent
of people
aged 45 to 74 years old partake in undertaking any crafts activities
.
In contrast
, the smallest cultural activity that Scots participated in was computer-based with a proportion of 6 %. It is followed by Any writing (7 %).Submitted by ieltscuns2022 on
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