The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The line graph shows
the
information about the utilization of Correct article usage
apply
energy
from 2008
report in the USA since 1980 and estimation futures until 2030.
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the 2008
Overall
, the
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apply
petrol
and oil
fuel
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fuels
mostly
used in the past, and Add a missing verb
were mostly
the
future uses will increase steadily, despite some Correct article usage
apply
fluctuated
in the past, Replace the word
fluctuation
while
coal same with
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as
petrol
and oil
uses. Others
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Other
uses
remained stable, Change the verb form
use
while
some will increase uses a
tiny portion.
In the past USA, started Change preposition
by a
used
Wrong verb form
using
petrol
and oil
energy
at around 35 units
in 1980, and significantly declined to just near
30 Change the word
nearly
units
in 1985, and made some fluctuations next 20 years
between around 30 units
and about 40 units
. The coal fuel
used relatively
stable 15 Add a missing verb
was relatively
years
ago and climbed to just over 20% in 1995 before slightly decreased
a tiny percentage uses in 2007, Wrong verb form
decreasing
then
steadily increased at
around 22% in 2013. On Change preposition
to
other
hand, nuclear made up a tiny portion Correct article usage
the other
units
of Change preposition
of units
energy
used in 2005 and remained relatively next 7 years
. While
solar/wind used
started Replace the word
use
approximately
4 Change preposition
at approximately
units
in 1980 and levelled off for 10 years
and declined at
Change preposition
to
round
3 Correct your spelling
around
units
in 1995, then
slightly increased until 2010. Hydropower used
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use
remined
relatively at begun and until 1990 and fluctuated between 1990 and 2010.
In the future USA, Correct your spelling
remained
reminded
petrol
and oil
uses
is expected steadily increase until to just under 50 Fix the agreement mistake
use
units
in 2030. Coal fuel
use will start at 21 units
in 2020, then
climbed
dramatically to 30 Wrong verb form
climb
units
in 2030. To be the fact that nuclear and solar/wind energy
uses will remain relatively the first consecutive years
in the future before they are slightly increased at
1 unit in 2030, Change preposition
to
while
hydropower fuel
will not make any difference use energy
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of energy
comparing
to the Wrong verb form
compared
last
past years
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, petrol, oil, fuel, units, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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