The bar chart below shows the proportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011. The pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person households.

The bar chart below shows the proportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011. The pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person households.
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The bar graph illustrates the living-alone percentages of both genders in England in 2011. The other graph shows data about bedroom numbers in houses for singles. It can be seen that more females witnessed living alone than men. Regarding sleeping areas, the majority were more than three-bedroom houses
while
only a few homes can accommodate more than 4 sleepers . Regarding the first chart, 16 to 49 age males who lived solely accounted for over half of the figure,
whereas
the number of females constitute the primary proportion in the age group 65 years old.
In addition
, the single ratio was equal for both sexes/genders in the 50-64 community. Concerning the number of bedrooms for singles, strikingly,
while
single homes took up only 28%, houses which can accommodate 2 to 3 sleepover people made up a significant share, at 60%.
Finally
, only just over 6% of singles processed more than 4 bedroom mansions, making it the minors.
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