The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

As the development of social networks is increasing day by day, there will be more and more
people
who want to share
information
in different fields
such
as scientific research, business, and the academic world.
However
, some
people
believe that some data is too important
too
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share. In
this
essay, we will discuss both views and my opinion. First of all, sharing documents can help
people
around the world gain more knowledge and approach technology more easily.
In addition
, there are many sources that can help students self-study and
also
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are also
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free to access.
For instance
, nowadays a lot of websites had already uploaded books which had been converted to
PDF
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PDFs
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for students who do not have enough money.
In contrast
, some
people
will use the
information
for some bad purpose. It
also
means that they will get the data which they have free to earn money.
For example
, some
people
use the PDF file of a book they found on
the
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social network to make a fake book and sell it.
Moreover
, if we share some important
information
that is
related to our business,
as a result
, some bad situations will happen. As an example, a famous restaurant
uploadss
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uploads
uploaded
their
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its
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secret recipe on the internet,
consequently
, there
wil
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will
be fewer customers than the initial. In conclusion, sharing
information
about scientific research, business and the academic world have a lot of benefits for human
such
as gain knowledge,
approach
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and approach
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technology
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to technology
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.
However
, from my perspective, we need to control what
people
upload by giving rules that we need to follow
while
using the internet.
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