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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the correlation between
age
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 and
number
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the number
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 of
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crime
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crimes
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 in tens of thousands
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 the pie chart represents the percentage of different sorts of
crime
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 that occurred in the UK
last
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 year.
Overall
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 the number of
crimes
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sky rocketed
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skyrocketed
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 from 12
years
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 and peaked at 20
years
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. The
crime
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 rate
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apply
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tumbled down till 28
years
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age
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of age
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,
then
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 reached
plateau
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a plateau
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from
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with
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 a gradual decrease. On the other side, violent
crimes
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 occupy the greatest portion of the pie chart and
and
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public order
crimes
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 occupy the least. The acme of number of
crimes
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 is 80 thousand which corresponds to the
age
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 20
years
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.
Absolute
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An absolute
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 zero
crime
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 rate is observed through
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age
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ages
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 0-8
years
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. In
case
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the case
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 of types of
crime
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 property
crime
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 and drug
crime
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 share almost equal portions. In conclusion, teenagers and young adults have the biggest contribution
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to
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crime
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the crime
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 rate.
This
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also
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 reflects in the pie chart as people in
this
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age
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 group tend to be more emotionally driven and turn to aggression quickly.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime, crimes, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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