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The pictures illustrate the development of a seaside village called Seaville over the period of 30 years, starting from 1980.

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The given maps illustrate the significant changes
of
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in
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 Seville's
village
 located near the sea over a thirty-year period, from 1980 to 2010. It is evident that there was a striking feature to
move
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moving
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 the remote
village
 into a tourist coastal
village
.
In particular
, the number of accommodations, facilities and infrastructures was increased in both the East
bank
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Bank
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 and
village
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the village
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.
To begin
 with, in 1980 East Bank witnessed an isolated place to the
village
 and have no residential area
while
 in 2010 a road and a bridge
was
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were
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 constructed in order to connect
two
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the two
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 banks.
In addition
, holiday cottages were built so as to expand the accommodation. Looking at the
village
 for more detail, it can be clearly seen that the hotel was mushrooming in 2010
while
 in 1980 there were a few cottages and hotels in the same place. Particularly, sand dunes and tea rooms were completely/entirely replaced by entertainment buildings and
the
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 similar pattern was true for woodland in 1980
transferred
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and transferred
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 into golf courses in 2010.
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