the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australia cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australia cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart compares the proposition of city dwellers in Australian regions in terms of buying and drinking
coffee
and
tea
which are the habits in several cities.
Overall
, the figures of percentage
in
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apply
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several
residents
who had habits for
went
Wrong verb form
going
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to a café for
coffee
or
tea
,
bought
Correct word choice
and bought
show examples
fresh and
instant
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
. Went to a café was chosen by citizens rather than buying fresh
coffee
and
instant
coffee
. It was the habits in the
last
4
weeks
. As a graph shows, the people who went to
café
Correct article usage
a café
show examples
for
coffee
or
tea
for the
last
4
weeks
had a great proportion in all of the regions in America. The largest proportions were in Melbourne, which had approximately 65% and followed by Hobart
then
Sydney
around 60%. The percentage of
instant
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
in five cities
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
show examples
more fall
interested
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interesting
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by
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residents
,
such
as
Sydney
.
Sydney
has 45% bought
instant
coffee
, compared to Brisbane which was the great, around 50%. Hobart has almost 55%
residents
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of residents
show examples
who bought
instant
coffee
. Fresh
coffee
was the little one who was interested in buying fresh
coffee
for the
last
4
weeks
in all
part
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parts
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. In Brisbane, 35% of
residents
went to get fresh
coffee
.
Also
,
Sydney
was the bigger percentage that bought fresh
coffee
.
At the end
of
the
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apply
show examples
several cities in America,
residents
chose to go to a cafe for
coffee
or
tea
in the
last
4
weeks
.
While
,
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apply
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the figures show, some people just want to buy fresh
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, residents, instant, weeks, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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