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The bar chart below shows the proportion of Singaporean workers in various occupations in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the proportion of Singaporean workers in various occupations in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The graph chart illustrates the information about the portion of different professions and
age
 teams that Singapore employees in 2005.
Overall
, it is from the graph that all features experience different trends. Managers, Professional and Technical were the highest percentage in the
age
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ages
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 25 to 54
years
 old.
However
, Clerical, Sales and Services reached the biggest percentage in the
age
 above 55
years
 old. It was followed by Production and Related at that
age
.
On the other hand
, Cleaners and Labourers are almost empty at the
age
 of 25 to 35. As a graph shows, the
Manager
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Managers
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, Professional and Technical got the many employees in the
age
 of 25 to 54.
At the
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The
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age
 of 25 to 34 reached approximately 60%
workers
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of workers
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, around 45%
in
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from
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 34
until
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to
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 44
years
 old, and stood at 39%
in
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from
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 45 to 54
years
 old.
However
, in the
age
 of above 55, the Clerical, Sales and Service was the highest number of
workers
 at around 24%. In
this
 case, it happens in the
age
 45 to 54 that the second highest proportion after the purple feature.
On the other hand
, Production and Related stand on the three highest that it happened in the
age
 of 45 to 54 was about 22%. Followed by
workers
from
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above 55
years
 old, and the end in Singaporean
workers
 by
age
 group and occupation, 2005 the
age
 of 25 to 34.
However
,
in
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the job of Cleaners and Labourers
that
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showed almost nothing about Singapore
workers
 at 25 to 34
years
 old. Many Singapore employees were above 55
years
 old.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, on the other hand".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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