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Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. What are the causes? Suggest some measures to reduce traffic in big cities.

#traffic #congestion #cities #measures
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It is certainly true that
traffic
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jams
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has
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 become a major issue in many major urban
areas
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 around the world. There are several reasons for
traffic
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 congestion
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however
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, I would like to recommend some steps to
adressing
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addressing
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 problem. On the one hand, the primary
reasons
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reason
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 why main
cities
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woruldwide
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worldwide
 struggle with
traffic
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jams
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 is
increase
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the increase
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the
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in the
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 number of vehicles in
cities
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.
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 is because many
people
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 from rural
areas
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 move to urban
areas
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 in order to find
a
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better job
opportunity
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opportunities
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,education ,and healthcare which
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this
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can
leads
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 to
growth
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the growth
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 of
population
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the population
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 in
cities
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. Poor public
transport
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 is another reason for
traffic
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jams
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.
This
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 is
due to
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 the fact that
,
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the
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apply
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public
transport
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often
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 slow and overcrowding , which
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this
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can discourage
people
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 to take it, and
then
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people
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 prefer to rely on their cars.
On the other hand
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, there are diverse measures
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taken
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 by the governments to mitigate the high-volume
traffic
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. The first effective measure, the authorities can motivate
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private companies and factories to move to countryside
areas
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, which
this
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 step can create better living standards in rural
areas
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 namely, jobs, education,
healthcare
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and healthcare
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.
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,
this
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 step can discourage
people
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 to migrate to
cities
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,
then
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 decrease the
inhabitants
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number of inhabitants
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 in
cities
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 and reduce the
traffic
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jams
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. The second solution,
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the
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that
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 lawmakers should make improvements in public
transport
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such
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,
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 trains, buses, and subways by
make
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it
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them
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 faster and less crowded, which
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this
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apply
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can
leads
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lead
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 to incentive individuals to take public
transport
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instead
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 of their cars.
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, cutting the number of cars
in
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on
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 our roads and
easy
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ease
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 the
traffic
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. In conclusion, there are different causes of
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 congestion including,
increase
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an increase
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the
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in the
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 population in urban
areas
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,
poor
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and poor
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 public
transport
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,
however
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,
the
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they
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 are some
solution
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solutions
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 to tackle
this
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 issue
such
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,
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apply
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 incentive the private companies to move to
agriculture
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areas
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,
enhance
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enhancing
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 the quality of public
transport
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.
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