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The line graph below shows how much money was spent on cars in four different countries in Asia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph below shows how much money was spent on cars in four different countries in Asia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The following line graph demonstrates the cost of vehicles in four countries in Asia over the period from 1995 to 2005. These countries include
China
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, Vietnam, Thailand and
Indonesia
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. The data are presented in US million
dollars
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. It is noticeable that
China
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 spent the most money on cars in all periods.
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Indonesia
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 spent the least only from 1995 to 2001. From 1995 to 2001,
China
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 the highest country with almost 90 million US
dollars
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 spent on cars.
However
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,
Indonesia
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 was the lowest country with only 30 US
dollars
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.
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, Vietnam and Thailand were the highest at approximately 70 and 60 US
dollars
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, respectively. After 2001 and until 2005, Similar patterns are shown in all countries except
Indonesia
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. It shows a dramatic increase from 40 to almost 70. Vietnam and Thailand continue to spend more but a very small difference is observed. As for ,
China
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 it is still the highest country to buy vehicles.
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,
China
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 dropped slightly in 2003.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, indonesia, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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