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The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.

The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.
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Given is a bar chart comparing four countries (Australia,
Sweden
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,
Iceland
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, and
Turkey
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) in terms of the percentage of reproduced
energy
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 between 1997 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there was an increase in the amount of renewable power in
Iceland
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 and
Sweden
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while
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 the opposite was true for that
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the remaining nations (Australia and
Turkey
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).
In addition
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,
energy
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 reproduced in
Iceland
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 maintained its highest position over the given period of time.
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 with, starting at roughly 5% and 38% in 1997, the proportion of renewable
energy
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 in
Sweden
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 and
Turkey
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 rose moderately to nearly 7% and 41% in 2000, respectively. In the next 10 years,
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 the amount of
energy
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 in
Sweden
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 increased gradually to less than 10%, the other in
Turkey
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 fell significantly to roughly 32%. Moving on to the remaining nations, the percentage of reproduced power in
Iceland
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 jumped rapidly from roughly 45% in 1997 to exactly 70% in 2010. Meanwhile, in Australia, there was a moderate fall in the number of renewable
energy
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 from less than 10% in 1997 to roughly 5% in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, iceland, turkey, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • renewable energy
  • total energy supply
  • percentage
  • overall
  • changed
  • increases
  • decreases
  • fluctuating
  • trend
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant
  • commitment
  • sustainability
  • environmental protection
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