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As water is a valuable resource, governments all over the world should control how much water their citizens use Do you agree or disagree

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It is popularly believed that
water
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 has been being a precious source,
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that
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 is why individuals should be managed by governments that how much
water
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 they are using. I fully agree with
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 condition.
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 most
people
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 claim that
people
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 must
use
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fresh
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water
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 they want .
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 is because
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 has been
using
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 for many purposes,
such
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 as
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household chores.
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,governments should supply
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 to all homes at no cost.
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 most parts of the earth
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 covered by
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 , some available places for using
water
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 are extremely restricted.
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, if governments strictly control the
use
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 of
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,
therefore
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, it may cause health problems.
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water
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 is very significant to humans' health.
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,
people
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 who worry about how to comply with government rules will
under
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the
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pressure .
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, these days ,
people
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 do not think about how much
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 they waste .Some
people
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 are utilizing
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 for unnecessary things
while
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 others need to drink it .
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, it causes a growth of lacking
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 . In some areas
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 as Africa,
people
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 even die of thirst.
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, a huge amount of
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 is polluted every year.
Water
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 is polluted by some locals who used sources of
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 namely lakes , rivers and
sea
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the sea
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 . So
water
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 saving is absolutely
necessity
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. If it is controlled,
people
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use
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 it more responsibly. All in all , my view is that the most efficient way to protect
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 recourse is
limiting
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use
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 and preventing
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 pollution ,
also
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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